This story is about a cheer leader
who just recently got a new coach. The new coach was very difficult to deal
with because of his strict attitude. It starts to show that the coach goes
beyond being strict he begins to act rude and insulting to the people on the
squad. The narrator is practicing one day when she was too tired to complete
the full she was supposed to when the coach forced her to attempt it anyway. As
she tried the rick she landed poorly and hurt her knee. She needed to stay on
the team but she was injured so the coach yelled her while she recovered.
Before she recovered the coach tried to make her do another tumbling pass but
the narrator was finally fed up and she left.
This
story was intended to show how passion can end up making people do things they don’t
want to do.
I think
this story does a good job at getting into the head of the narrator. She also
seems like a believable character.
I would
like to see a first person version of this story; I think it is the best way to
get into the mind of the main character.
I think
the characters are all pretty important because there are so few of them. I
also believe that the coach should be elaborated on as a character.
I think
the scene with the two cheerleaders talking about the coach could be left out, it
does not really add to the story.
The
story never gets too dull. The pacing is balanced very well between exciting
action parts and expository thoughts.
I think
this story has a lack of imagery and describing the scene in a more interesting
manner could really add something for the reader.
I
thought most of the dialogue was natural except for the two cheer leaders speculating
on their new coach. I thought the speech given by the coach felt very real.
The
setting was not described well enough I think. The gym should have been
described in order to bring the readers in.
The
opening scene should have been shown to us instead of just explained through the
main characters feelings.
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