Response to Adam Smith

This story is about a young girl who gets adopted and goes to live with an over protective widow who thinks the world is out to get her. The young girl named Margaret is soon finding herself bored and sneaks out one night only to witness an assault by her the only boy she knows. She then runs home most likely scarred for life.

I like how this story develops the relationship between the milkman and the main character as a sort of forbidden love.

                The point of view was third person and it worked quite well for this story. The point of view allowed you to see from a well rounded perspective that helped give light to all the characters even though the story mainly followed Margaret.

                The two main characters of Lucy and Margaret were both interesting however they also seemed very typical, especially Lucy. As the overly cautious mother who doesn’t trust the world she seems to fill the niche that is often seen in stories.

                This story does a pretty good job at developing; it starts at an orphanage and continues chronologically. The story ends with a lot of excitement.

                The story is well paced starting off somewhat slow but ending with a very fast and interesting turn that makes the piece worth reading.

The story could use just a little more imagery. The descriptions of setting are not quite enough to give me a sense of place for the story. We know it takes place in London but the only place that has really good imagery is the flat that Lucy lives in.

This story is very lacking in dialogue partly because there are so few characters. I think the story would do well to have a few more shown conversation.

The setting is mid 20^th century London and it fits the story perfectly. The post war sentiment is shown and the frightened widow believes the world is full of “wolves”.

The opening is a good context setting section for the story. We learn the characters and the location.