Response to Rhamah Norris

This story is about a cat pound and one worker who came to nearly resent the place for its smells and tedious required chores. At the pound there is a cat name Lily that had always been a good, well trained and acclimated to house life. The only problem with Lily is that she was missing an eye. A family walks through the pound and is clearly disgusted but eventually a young boy agrees that Lily is perfect. The cat then scratches the boy and he changes his mind.

I really enjoy the narrator’s voice in this story. It is relaxed and relatable allowing the reader to get drawn in to the story. The narrator is the type of person that is always making observations about the world, almost like she is people watching.

                The point of view is first person from the main character whose works at the animal shelter. This perspective definitely adds to the story because it is more personable.

                I enjoyed the characters in this story, especially the cat lady. She is a stereotype but that cliché works well for some reason because I have personally known cat ladies. The fact that she is referred to as the cat lady is a very comedic aspect of the story. The little boy in the end of the story could use some more characterization.

                The development of the story was a little weak, there was not much of a plot and the action seemed to mean very little to the story. I would suggest having more meaningful events occur during the span of the story.

                The pacing was well done but like a said the events were a little weak. The change in the end never really occurred for the main character and I was left wondering what the story had really been about.

                The imagery in this story was great. Describing the bags as “belching out “when they were thrown to the floor was a perfect image.

                Dialogue in this story was fairly limited but was natural and felt real.

                The structure was well put together but again more needs to happen in the story in order to make it feel more like a story.

                The opening was a good start for this story but the closing never brought around change or any conclusions