Response to “Losing Sincerity”

Losing sincerity is a story about a young man who was recently promoted to a managerial position at a venue. As well as his new responsibilities h also has a new girlfriend who works under him. A sorority function was booked at the venue and most of the story is about the main character attempting to handle the hordes of people dressed in a Woodstock theme. After ungrateful employees complain and the party gets out of hand the main character is forced to shut the party down.

                I enjoyed the fact that this story’s main character had such a strong voice. I also thought it was a good attempt at tension having a girl friend who works for him.

                The point of view is first person and I think it works very well in this story because of the stressful nature of the story it’s nice to be inside the main character’s head.

                The main character has an interesting voice but we don’t know much about him. All the other characters could use some work as well, most of them seem pretty one dimensional and almost clichéd.

                The development of the story is fairly solid. There are not really any confusing parts that need clarifying but I think some more time spent on the early and middle stages of the actually party would help the story to not seem quite as rushed.

                The story is not dull or slow it just has points where the action is all within the narrator’s head and I think it works well for this kind of story.

                The imagery in this story is sometimes really nice it just is not consistent throughout the entire time.

                The dialogue is necessary for this story but because some of the characters seem a little one dimensional the dialogue sometimes feels forced.

                The structure of this story is chronological and at no point is it confusing or hard to understand.

                The setting is a venue most likely in a college town. The venue itself could use more description

                The opening was a good use of exposition to set the back drop of the story. The closing finished up the plot and resolved the girlfriend issues but there was no significant change in the main character.