Response to "A Dream"

This story is about a stoner, Gabe, who quit or failed out of the Military academy and now studies creative writing at Colombia. The story covers two of his dreams and the day in between. Gabe seems to be struggling with confidence issues as well as weight, hygiene and sloth. He wants to have a real relationship but his only friends share just the minimal connection of formalities and weed. Much of the story is Gabe remembering pain about the past, particularly feeling remorse about an incident with a girl he claimed to have loved.

I really enjoyed the opening scene of the story. The dream sequence was surreal, frightening and did a great job at drawing me into the story. The voice of the narration was also very complex and coherent which made the story interesting throughout.

The point of view for this story is third person mixed with the thought of the main character from time to time. I think the perspective of this story worked very well.

The characters in this story seem boring but it also seems as thought that was the point. The main character, Gabe, has a lot of depth and history. Win does not have much going on and could probably be developed more.

The development and pacing of the story was clear and steady. The story never got too dull or ever outpaced itself.

The dialogue seemed natural but against to backdrop of the narration it seemed very out of place. The narration was poetic and dialogue was bluntly colloquial.

The setting could have had more imagery to support it. The imagery was mostly utilized in action and it did a great job and describing scene it just never really focused on setting.

Overall, the story was incredibly well written and very enjoyable.